This week's Journal Past Blast entry is the first real poem that I ever wrote and liked. It
was written during my first year in college – when I had my first real
boyfriend. Anyway. Here it is.
My Perfect Lover
Cast over me the
shadow of your
fine black skin
And provoke my anticipation
with visible glares
of inspiration.
Intrigue my mind
with the passion
in your heart.
Beat your ambitious vows
into my love’s chamber,
accelerating my life’s rhythm
to a thunderous, eloquent melody.
Brush not ungranted wishes
upon my lips, but ignite
the blackened hopes of
my love’s –, disparaging
only the temptation
to forever illuminate
the glow of one lover’s night.
Whisper into my ears
the desires of such satisfaction
and ease secret nightmares
of history’s sexual deceptions
engraved
as tokens
in my burdensome heart
that only now is pulsating
from your flaunting pleasures.
Lessen now the fire
of our passion flared in rhapsody
and remain once more
in your love’s soul
so that we may discover
an incarnate, as such, as
My Perfect Lover
Lovely. So passionate and vivid.
ReplyDeleteLust and vivid imagery make this a great and passionate read.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed that. The third verse, especially, is wonderful.
ReplyDeleteDo you find yourself reading these entries and thinking, 'hmmmmm That's pretty good!' If not, do so!
Love your word choices-- perfect to convey the emotions.
ReplyDeleteVery, very passionate. You were much more mature than I was in my first year of college!
ReplyDeleteFist love is so hot!
ReplyDeleteVery well done!
Wow! Passionate!
ReplyDeleteNicely done!
That was so beautiful. Wonderful. Did your boyfriend read it? I wonder what he thought. Thanks for sharing. :)
ReplyDeletefull of passion. Are you still together?
ReplyDelete.......dhole
First love is wonderful, isn't it? It evokes such passion in us. Beautiful, Nancy.
ReplyDeleteWow, great stuff Nancy. Did you ever show him this?
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